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Friday, September 19, 2014

Haiku Horizons- Train

This is for Haiku Horizons and this week's prompt is 'Train'

Train’s parting whistle
Oh! Turn at least once, pleads my heart
No! Can't be our last goodbye


 No joys and no cries
A stoned heart does not feel
Trains of past pass quietly



26 comments:

  1. Brought a few painful memories back.

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    1. Hi Red

      it happens sometimes...

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  2. The first pictured the scene.Both are nice.

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  3. trains of unforgiven past, bring much pain to joyful heart.

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    1. Hi Payal

      yes, rightly said :)

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  4. Poignant yet beautiful. Well done Ankita! :*

    Just one little thing.. try to compress words in 5-7-5 syllables. :)

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    1. Hi Mirage

      Thanks a ton dear :)

      Ya sure, I'll take care in future :)

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  5. Beautifully written and very touching! Thanks for sharing, Ankita!

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  6. Well written Ankita.. last goodbyes and trains of past do bring some bitter sweet memories back.. :)

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    1. Hi Megha

      Thanks a ton dear :)

      yes, indeed!

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  7. i wish i can turn the clock back .. this brought some memories

    Bikram

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    1. Hi Bikram

      Thank you! I am happy this post touched your heart :)

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  8. love the twist in the comclusind lines!

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    1. Hi Vandana

      Thanks a lot! :)

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