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Friday, November 1, 2013

WOW: Being Watched!

Yay!!! It's now a WOW post!


'One Thing They Didn’t Know That They Were Being Watched'   


All the arguments as if became pointless, the tough decision disallowed appeals to reach those standing inside the gate. ‘Thump’! With a loud bang, the curly haired man threw old hold all and trunk out. The neighbors, a curious and loyal audience to the family drama, now quietly waited for the climax.

Despite pleadings and curses, the two feeble bodies were given a push. Sitting outside, they did say something with watery eyes and quivering lips but those on the other side, did not know that language so, the conversation was snapped. 

Inside, quite relieved of the garbage, they heaped on the sofa. One thing they didn’t know that they were being watched carefully by a light-eyed eight year old boy from that high round window; one that stood as a witness to the same drama played by those outside the gate, some three decades back, when a curly haired child saw all that, through it, carefully…

This post (fiction) is a part of Write Over the Weekend, an initiative for Indian Bloggers by BlogAdda. We give out creative writing topics each weekend for Indian bloggers.



46 comments:

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  2. Wow! Impressive writing with refined use of language.

    Children are great imitators, so they should be given something worthy to imitate and not hatred. Cause whatever they absorb at tender age remains within and will influence their choices later in life.

    It is a pity that elderly parents get mistreated when they actually need help, support and comfort.

    Someday everyone gets old, ageing is natural and there is no escape, so the circle of Karma will treat you right if you treated your parents right.

    Well written, all the best!! :)

    Take care,
    Cheers :)

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  3. short & precise..liked it!

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  4. You are such a great writer! Love it! Thanks for sharing!

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  5. Excellent story Ankita. These people don't know they will receive the same fate in the future.

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  6. Wow...I was reading your post and I just saw that u commented on mine :) lovely post...children absorb every word and every action of ours...its so important we set a good example for them :)

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  7. Very well narrated. Children learn from their parents and parents need to teach their children the right virtues.

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  8. Hi Nikhil

    Thanks a lot! Would love to accept it :)

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  9. Hi Sai

    Thank you for this wonderful compliment! I am really glad you liked it! Yes, you are very true. What goes around, comes around..i wonder why people do not understand this simple funda.

    thank you!!
    Cheers!

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  10. Hi Rinaya

    Thank you for this wonderful compliment!
    I am really happy you liked it!

    Happy Diwali!

    :)

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  11. Hi Katrin

    O God!! Thank you for this amazing compliment!!!

    I am really glad you liked it!

    :D

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  12. Hi SG

    Thank you! I am very happy that you liked it! Yes, you are very true. What goes around, comes around.

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  13. Hi Preethi

    Thank you! I am very happy that you liked it! Yes, you are very true. We must be careful with children and should try to set only good examples :)

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  14. Hi Pooja

    Thank you! I am really glad that you liked it! Yes, you are very correct.

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  15. Love this story great writing. B

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  16. Nice one Ankita.... One reason why it is so important to be extremely careful while your child is growing up. Bad/careless parenting has already given so many tragedies in the recent past.

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    1. Hi Nihar

      Thank youu!! Yes, i agree. that's why parenting is compared to 'tapasya'.

      :)

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  17. children always imitate the elders, so give them something good to copy..

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    1. Hi Renu

      Yes, thats why one has to be quite careful

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  18. Hi Buttons

    Thanks a ton!

    :)

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  19. This was a short post with a strong message. I actually read it twice as the last paragraph took me by surprise. Good one :)

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    1. Hi Maithili

      Thanks a lot for liking and appreciating :)
      I am really happy that you liked it :)



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    2. Kids observe unseen and learn the good and bad from parents..A nice and crisp story.

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    3. Hello KP Sir

      yes, very true. Thanks a lot!

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  20. Keep on writing, great job!

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  21. We've always heard about reaping what we sow. Your Karma catches up on you one day or the other. Lovely post Ankita.

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    1. Hi Geeta

      Yes, exactly but unfortunately, most people do not understand this simple thing! Thank you! I am really happy you liked it!

      Happy Diwali :)

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  22. What goes around comes around. So true. :)

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  23. Hi Jyothi

    Yes, thank you!

    :)

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  24. i guess that why it is told why parenting matters so much in upbringings .. well written :)

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    1. Hi Ankur

      Yups! Thanks a ton!

      Happy Diwali!
      :)

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  25. Nice take on the prompt!
    In physics, every action has an equal and opposite reaction.
    In life, every action has an equal (sometimes greater) and opposite reaction, which may come after many years.

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  26. Hi PI

    Thanks a ton! yes, exactly!

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  27. That wasva really nice take on the prompt. Short yet powerful. :)

    P.S. Thank you for visiting my space. You got a follower here :)

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    1. Hi ME

      Thanks a lot! I am really happy you liked it!

      Thanks a lot again :D

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  28. Very thoughtful take on the prompt!

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  29. Hi Tarang

    Thanks a lot!!

    :D

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  30. Children are so perceptive of things. Adults often wonder why children behave as they do - but children only copy what they see. Nicely done.

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    1. Hi Suzy

      Yes, they really are. that's why one has to be very careful when they are around! Thank you! I am really happy that you liked it :)

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  31. There are Hindi films based on this too, Ankita!
    'Jaisi Karni Waisi Bharni' - we reap what we sow..
    True story, happens often...

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    1. Hi Anita

      Yes, still pple do not get this! Ya, we reap what we sow..very true

      :)

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  32. Time repeats itself,nice story with a message

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    1. Thank you Cifar Shayar!! I am really glad you liked this post :)

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