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Wednesday, June 18, 2014

Haiku Horizons - Open

This is for Haiku Horizons and this week's prompt is 'open'

I open old diary
Choked on tears, I still smile
Kissing that dried rose


From clay cage I flew
To open gates above
‘Missed you kid!’ He cried!


(Each haiku has 17 syllables arranged in 5-7-5 pattern)



46 comments:

  1. It is simply beautiful to see your space here and beautiful haiku.. the second one took my breath away.. a fantastic thought and visual too..

    Many thanks for visiting my page Ankita.. Something made me come to your profile first and write an email for you.. and then before I could click 'send' I came to your page here..I am happy that I did that..

    Regards,

    RS:)

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    1. Hello Sir

      Thanks a ton! I am so happy that you liked the verses!

      Keep visiting :)

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  2. the first one is lovely yet poignant !
    reminds me of a post of mine
    http://rajkumarmilan.wordpress.com/2014/04/02/rose/

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    1. Hi rajkumar

      Thanks a lot!! I read yours and it is really beautiful!

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    2. thank you too Ankita . hope you like my ''open '' too !

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    3. Hi rajkumar

      I loved your Haiku :)

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  3. Beautiful.The second one was profound in meaning! Thanks

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    1. Hello KP Sir

      Thank you!! I am so happy that you liked the Haiku :D

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  4. memories indeed .. nostalgic .. You know sometimes I cant dare opening a diary I use to write because it has so many beautiful memories .. and some that break heart now ..

    Bikram

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    1. Hi Bikram

      Yes, some memories make us cry our heart out but still we can't help revisiting them..Thanks a lot!

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  5. I think both Haiku are fine but the second one had a great deal of pathos and was very moving. Fine job.....

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    1. Hi melanie

      Thanks a ton! I am so happy that you loved the haiku :)

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  6. Beautiful poem. I like the second one.

    Hay, congratulations. You are a quick learner. Both the haikus have followed the 5-7-5 syllable pattern.Perfect.

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    1. Hi SG

      Thank you!! Yes, this time I took special care of the rule :)

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  7. Fantastic! Thanks for sharing!

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    1. Hi Katrin

      Vielen danke meine lieben :)

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  8. What a fantastic composition and the fragrance of old memories makes me nostalgic most of the time.

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    1. Hi Sangita

      Thanks a lot! I am so glad that you enjoyed the Haiku :D

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  9. Your haiku are perfect Ankita!! Nostalgia and poignancy are great ingredients for a poem.

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    1. Hi Reshma

      Thanks a ton for the wonderful compliment :D

      True! i agree :)

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  10. Simple and old memories do sometimes make us feel sad and sometimes feel happy.
    Good one!

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    1. Hi Stephen

      yes, exactly! Thanks a lot :)

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    1. Hi Sanjay

      Thanks a ton! I am glad that you liked the verses :)

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  12. The 2nd one is my favorite :-)

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    1. Hi Amrit

      Thanks a lot! I am so happy you liked it!
      :D

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    2. wow! the second one is worth reading again and again! superb :)

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    3. Hi Apurva

      Thanks a ton!! I am really so thankful and glad for this wonderful compliment!

      keep coming :D

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  13. Beautiful Haiku...!

    Escape from the cage of clay...Moksha!

    Awaiting more such nice Haikus from you...

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    1. Hello Ashu Bhaiyya

      Thanks a ton! I am really so happy that you read these and enjoyed too! thanks again for the wonderful compliment :)

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  14. Hi Ankita,
    I've nominated you for the Liebstar Award. Please click the link below for further details
    http://callitatale.blogspot.in/2014/06/the-liebster-award.html

    And oh, an amazing collection of Haikus :)

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    1. Hi Soumyaa

      Thanks a ton! I am really happy that you liked the Haiku!

      Thanks for the award, will take it up very soon!

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  15. The second stole my peace!

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    1. Hi Live2cherish

      Thanks a ton! that is an amazing compliment :D

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  16. I would love to find a dried rose in a book :)
    Loved both the essence of both the verses.

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    1. Hi Vinodini

      yup! stumbling on old forgotten things is always a pleasure :)

      Thanks a lot! I am really glad you liked the verses :D

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  17. Good effort :) I like how I can interpret it in several ways.

    I have always wanted to try my hand at Haiku but poetry has never been my thing, so still lurking in the shadows :P

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    1. Hi PeeV ee

      Thanks a ton! I am really happy that you enjoyed the Haiku :)

      I would love to read urs :)

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  18. I like this. Memories! Nicely done.

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    1. Hi jazzytower

      Thanks a ton! I am rally so glad :D

      I loved your Haiku too :)

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