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Tuesday, July 1, 2014

Haiku Horizons- Decline

This is for Haiku Horizons and this week's prompt is 'decline'


I curse this life when
Moon declines and dawn breaks
One more day with myself 


Lying curled alone
Declined sweet lullabies
A motherless child    


  




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40 comments:

  1. Red HandedJuly 01, 2014

    The pain..the unwanted void.
    Captured well!

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    1. Ankita July 01, 2014

      Hi Red

      Thanks a lot, I am really happy the verses touched you :)

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  2. KatrinJuly 02, 2014

    Love them. You are such a good writer!

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    1. Ankita July 02, 2014

      Hi Katrin

      Danke! That's an awesome compliment :D

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  3. Amrita 'Chinmay'July 02, 2014

    Let's embrace the void, it's the empty spot from where Light emerges <3

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    1. Ankita July 02, 2014

      Hi Ander Ka Haal

      Very true! I agree :)

      <3

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  4. AathiraJuly 02, 2014

    Such haunting words, Ankita. This one hurts... You have written the Haiku so beautifully.

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    1. Ankita July 02, 2014

      Hi A

      Thanks dear for such lovely compliment :D

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  5. Ph_July 02, 2014

    heart felt words and hurtful picture!!!

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    1. Ankita July 02, 2014

      Hi Ph_

      Thanks dear. I am really glad you liked the Haiku :)

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  6. RajeshJuly 02, 2014

    Hey, why write of pain? God bless.

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    1. Ankita July 02, 2014

      Hi Rajesh

      Just like that, this prompt fitted well into these thoughts :)

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  7. rudraprayagaJuly 02, 2014

    Why a bit distressed.The haiku are nice.

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    1. Ankita July 02, 2014

      Hi rudraprayag

      Not at all! These are just random takes on the prompt :)

      Thanks a lot!

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  8. Amrit SinhaJuly 03, 2014

    I can relate to the 1st one ... I too feel the same on Monday mornings :p

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  9. Beloo MehraJuly 03, 2014

    The pain of being so alone...and to bear it every day. Nicely expressed.

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    1. Ankita July 03, 2014

      Hi Beloo

      yes, this pain corrodes the heart the whole life.

      Thank you!

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  10. BikramJuly 03, 2014

    oh that is sadddddddddd... :(

    i wish and pray no child has to go through that

    Bikram

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    1. Ankita July 03, 2014

      Hi Bikram

      As i saw Birmingham on live traffic feed widget, I knew you are on this blog! heheh!

      Yes, very sad but the worst part is the attitude of other people who decline to extend a loving hand.

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  11. MarkJuly 03, 2014

    The motherless child...I can't help but think of all the children fleeing the violence in Guatemala, and making their way alone across Mexico to cross into the United States...

    Down a Steep Decline

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  12. OnkarJuly 03, 2014

    Very touching

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  13. LocomenteJuly 03, 2014

    Thats really sad and heart breaking!
    Very tough on the child!

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    1. Ankita July 03, 2014

      Hi Locomente

      yes, very tough indeed.

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  14. rabbi neil fleischmannJuly 04, 2014

    These are touching and beautiful. The second one brought to mind Rock Me To Sleep by Jill Sobule.

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    1. Ankita July 04, 2014

      Hi rabbi

      Thank you! I'll look up that song on youtube :)

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  15. KParthasarathiJuly 04, 2014

    I liked both but second more

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  16. Magical Mystical TeacherJuly 04, 2014

    Please also consider linking your poem at Haiku My Heart. We look forward to your presence in our community. Thanks so much!

    Click here: Haiku My Heart

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    1. Ankita July 04, 2014

      Hi MMT

      Thanks a ton! I have done it, please check :)

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  17. J CJuly 05, 2014

    Reading this made me sad. It's a sign of a good writer, drawing in the reader.

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    1. Ankita July 05, 2014

      Hi Judie

      Oh! This is such a nice compliment, thank you for it!

      :)

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  18. rebeccaJuly 05, 2014

    welcome ankita to recuerda mi corazon and haiku my heart, we are all so pleased to have you join us! your haiku are haunting...your writing stunning. i will look forward to fridays and your return!

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    1. Ankita July 05, 2014

      Hi rebecca

      Thanks a lot!! I am really so glad that you liked these Haiku! I am so proud to be associated with your portal :)

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  19. AnonymousJuly 05, 2014

    Oh wow, these broke my heart!
    All the best to you -

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    1. Ankita July 05, 2014

      Hi blogitorloseit

      Thanks a lot! I am so glad you liked them :D

      Thanks and same to you!!

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  20. ReshmaJuly 10, 2014

    Beautifully done Ankita, your words left a lump in my throat, esp the second Haiku..

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    1. Ankita July 10, 2014

      HI Reshma

      Thanks a ton! I am glad that the second Haiku touched you

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