On my way to my rainbow
That is but in my mind,
I raced as always and met a spider
“You are mad” I said
Your web is nothing but a mirage
For you rule here alone
Unheard of, in a kingdom unknown
Too proud of your imaginary throne
Nay... friend, you are a like fellow too, said he
I live in my kingdom and you in your perception
That being but a faint shadow of reality
You erect huge walls and let not the ideas in
Stagnant frame rots and you dance in the sweet scent
Shunned ideas lay like dead and your merry your win
Are you not living in your own world?
My kingdom still is better for it is real and stout
And yours, made up of imporous walls
That keeps all new change far and out
How exact was each word he said!
I pondered and the spider was true
I am a criminal, the victim being my soul
Deserves a place in English textbooks.. Seriously
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beautiful thoughtful.
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ideas in stagnant frame rots and you dance in the sweet scent..
really good poem....
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nice :) What is reality?
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reality is what actually happens as against what should happen
it was really good.. i second abhinav.
ReplyDeletethe pictures at the proper places were also nice...
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m so glad u liked it
So, true.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written :)
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m so glad :D
Its unbelievably good!!! Bravo babe!!!!! Publish it!!!! :-)
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thanks a ton dearrie!!
Just too good!! Has so much of depth in it.
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Excellent. Very thoughtful.
ReplyDeletevery nice poem...every word so very true!
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Thanks for visiting my blog and for your lovely comment.
ReplyDeleteI appreciate for your wonderful poem. Keep it up!
Good food for thought and spicy curry for the soul. AS cooks some deliciously interesting dishes of prose and poetry in her kitchen of creativity. I am waiting for more such surprising additions to her menu.
ReplyDeleteSoul and Spider, both weave their own webs in this physical world. How true. But, is it worth breaking the webs? After all, it is the web which makes the spider a true spider.
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hello Ashu Bhaiyya!
ReplyDeletefirst of all thanks a lot for this lovely comment :D
I'll try my best to fulfill your expectations :)
yes right.. out thoughts make us an educated person, prudent and wist but these must be open and flexible :)
Sorry I was still editing when you commented, so you missed the last part in the post :)
ReplyDeleteInformed sources however claim, Rakhi is an eyewash, on Mr.Fevicol's advice, Anu Malik has been hired to remix Waca Waca and it will be sung and performed by Bappi Lahiri (in Na'vi costume and an extra kilo of gold).
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ReplyDeleteoh! read it now.. good post :)
lovely poem,
ReplyDeletewhat a juicy and fun spirits here. enjoyed your word flow!
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very nicely said.. the last verse especially was very good :)
ReplyDeletemine for the rally is ~here~
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Wow, I feel like cheering after reading this. So great. Wonderful. I loved it.
ReplyDelete...In shame hung my head
ReplyDeleteHow exact was each word he said!
I pondered and the spider was true
I am a criminal, the victim being my soul
As I broke the walls , like a bird it flew!...
...Awesome ending to what is a wonderful piece of writing. :-)
First time here...
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Hummming Bird at its best...
Happy Rally...
Sweet Dish
--Someone Is Special--
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EXCELLENT WORK!!! :D
ReplyDeleteBeautiful... ur feel are portrayed so well here.
i can picture the scene as i read every line :)
your good =)
hi Harshika
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What a great poem. I love the dialogue and the ending was beautiful.
ReplyDeletenice little poem.. thanks so much for sharing!
ReplyDeletehere's my rally post:
http://lifeloveandmisery.wordpress.com/2010/09/12/collapse/
i really love this poem, great job!
ReplyDeleteThis is a wonderful read!<3 :3
ReplyDeleteThis read like a fable. So well done!
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m so very glad
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m so glad :D
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You have painted a beautiful picture with your words...thanks so very much for linking with Potluck Poetry, it is wonderful to have you here. Much love xx
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what a sweet surprise...
ReplyDeleteGlad that you make it all the way to Australia (Amanda) and New York City (Kavita)!
Thanks for the yummy treat.
please bring in more and feel free to taste others shares.
Happy Happy Monday!
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Very, very well written. I love the word play here. Love and Light, Sender
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I never met a Buddhist spider before, but perhaps that's because I didn't pay attention.
ReplyDeleteAn interesting dish you passed for this week's potluck!
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'Buddhist spider'.. hahaha..lol!
that was cute indeed!
thanks a lot and keep coming!
Wonderfully expressed truths. Nice blog, too. I love the kitty. Victoria
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thanks a ton! yups I love this kitten too!
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Excellent piece of Work.. The conversation and realization has so blatantly and yet so beautifully sketched...
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Love
Olivia
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This is wonderful! I love the conversation with the wise spider.
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nice..
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thanks a lot for such a wonderful comment :)
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Well that was smart. You just told a short story in poetry form, but still sounding like a short story.
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thanks a ton!
You've spun a fine tale. I liked it as well, imagery from Lewis Carroll comes to mind.
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thanks a ton for this wonderful compliment!
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hey there! love your beautiful work! So deeep....
ReplyDeleteo when you have the time check out me blog!
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I loved ur blog too :)
excellent, really no words to express how beautifully it was written. awesome.
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