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'One Thing They Didn’t Know That They Were Being Watched'
All the arguments as if became pointless, the tough decision
disallowed appeals to reach those standing inside the gate. ‘Thump’! With a
loud bang, the curly haired man threw old hold all and trunk out. The neighbors, a curious and loyal audience to the family drama, now quietly waited
for the climax.
Despite pleadings and curses, the two feeble bodies were
given a push. Sitting outside, they did say something with watery eyes and
quivering lips but those on the other side, did not know that language so, the
conversation was snapped.
Inside, quite relieved of the garbage, they heaped on the
sofa. One thing they didn’t
know that they were being watched carefully
by a light-eyed eight year old boy from that high round window; one that stood
as a witness to the same drama played by those outside the gate, some three
decades back, when a curly haired child saw all that, through it, carefully…
This post (fiction) is a part of Write Over the Weekend, an initiative for Indian Bloggers by BlogAdda. We give out creative writing topics each weekend for Indian bloggers.
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Wow! Impressive writing with refined use of language.
ReplyDeleteChildren are great imitators, so they should be given something worthy to imitate and not hatred. Cause whatever they absorb at tender age remains within and will influence their choices later in life.
It is a pity that elderly parents get mistreated when they actually need help, support and comfort.
Someday everyone gets old, ageing is natural and there is no escape, so the circle of Karma will treat you right if you treated your parents right.
Well written, all the best!! :)
Take care,
Cheers :)
short & precise..liked it!
ReplyDeleteYou are such a great writer! Love it! Thanks for sharing!
ReplyDeleteExcellent story Ankita. These people don't know they will receive the same fate in the future.
ReplyDeleteWow...I was reading your post and I just saw that u commented on mine :) lovely post...children absorb every word and every action of ours...its so important we set a good example for them :)
ReplyDeleteVery well narrated. Children learn from their parents and parents need to teach their children the right virtues.
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Hi Sai
ReplyDeleteThank you for this wonderful compliment! I am really glad you liked it! Yes, you are very true. What goes around, comes around..i wonder why people do not understand this simple funda.
thank you!!
Cheers!
Hi Rinaya
ReplyDeleteThank you for this wonderful compliment!
I am really happy you liked it!
Happy Diwali!
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Hi Katrin
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I am really glad you liked it!
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Hi SG
ReplyDeleteThank you! I am very happy that you liked it! Yes, you are very true. What goes around, comes around.
Hi Preethi
ReplyDeleteThank you! I am very happy that you liked it! Yes, you are very true. We must be careful with children and should try to set only good examples :)
Hi Pooja
ReplyDeleteThank you! I am really glad that you liked it! Yes, you are very correct.
Love this story great writing. B
ReplyDeleteNice one Ankita.... One reason why it is so important to be extremely careful while your child is growing up. Bad/careless parenting has already given so many tragedies in the recent past.
ReplyDeleteHi Nihar
DeleteThank youu!! Yes, i agree. that's why parenting is compared to 'tapasya'.
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children always imitate the elders, so give them something good to copy..
ReplyDeleteHi Renu
DeleteYes, thats why one has to be quite careful
Hi Buttons
ReplyDeleteThanks a ton!
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This was a short post with a strong message. I actually read it twice as the last paragraph took me by surprise. Good one :)
ReplyDeleteHi Maithili
DeleteThanks a lot for liking and appreciating :)
I am really happy that you liked it :)
Kids observe unseen and learn the good and bad from parents..A nice and crisp story.
DeleteHello KP Sir
Deleteyes, very true. Thanks a lot!
Keep on writing, great job!
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Hi Anon
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We've always heard about reaping what we sow. Your Karma catches up on you one day or the other. Lovely post Ankita.
ReplyDeleteHi Geeta
DeleteYes, exactly but unfortunately, most people do not understand this simple thing! Thank you! I am really happy you liked it!
Happy Diwali :)
What goes around comes around. So true. :)
ReplyDeleteHi Jyothi
ReplyDeleteYes, thank you!
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i guess that why it is told why parenting matters so much in upbringings .. well written :)
ReplyDeleteHi Ankur
DeleteYups! Thanks a ton!
Happy Diwali!
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Nice take on the prompt!
ReplyDeleteIn physics, every action has an equal and opposite reaction.
In life, every action has an equal (sometimes greater) and opposite reaction, which may come after many years.
Hi PI
ReplyDeleteThanks a ton! yes, exactly!
That wasva really nice take on the prompt. Short yet powerful. :)
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Hi ME
DeleteThanks a lot! I am really happy you liked it!
Thanks a lot again :D
Very thoughtful take on the prompt!
ReplyDeleteHi Tarang
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot!!
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Children are so perceptive of things. Adults often wonder why children behave as they do - but children only copy what they see. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteHi Suzy
DeleteYes, they really are. that's why one has to be very careful when they are around! Thank you! I am really happy that you liked it :)
very creepy! nice!!!
ReplyDeleteHi Shadow
DeleteThanks a lot!
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There are Hindi films based on this too, Ankita!
ReplyDelete'Jaisi Karni Waisi Bharni' - we reap what we sow..
True story, happens often...
Hi Anita
DeleteYes, still pple do not get this! Ya, we reap what we sow..very true
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Time repeats itself,nice story with a message
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