In these inane labyrinthine games
I lost my dear soul somewhere
A brooding frame only remains
Weary of competing forever
Very unlike my beaming face
My soul looks gloomy and shaded
Got strayed in this golden maze
It’s shamed, bruised and stark naked
To attain that starry rainbow
I dissolved myself in the toil
Virtues died; morals departed long ago
Though, I did achieve the tangible pile
Now, a hollow body wails and mourns
I don’t see my soul, even light or morning dew
Only more bodies on more pile-thrones
Should I search alone or have these awakened too?
Quite powerful. Dissolving into the toil helps our thoughts. A beautiful poem and the last line makes me wonder the same question.
ReplyDeleteA well thought, deep poem...
ReplyDeletenicely written poem.. really appealed to me cuz it reflects my thoughts albeit in a more beautiful form..
ReplyDeleteThe atrophy of the soul in the chase for material and mundane things with all the compromises has been brought out well in the poem.What remains despite the acquisitions is just the shell bereft of soul in its pristine form
ReplyDeleteLoved the ending rhymes crafted without loosing the "soul" of the poem:)
ReplyDeleteLoved the ending rhymes crafted without losing the "soul" of the poem!:) Happy blogging:)
ReplyDeleteEven I too...liked the ending.. awakening part...deeply philosophical..Nice one.
ReplyDeletehey i posted a comment here..some hungry ghost must have swallowed hehehe how u doing buddy long time no c..wishes
ReplyDeleteHi Saru,
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot.I am really glad u liked this poem!
Hi Pink,
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Hi Shrikant,
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Hi KP
ReplyDeleteYes, very true. Your comment makes me recall two lines of a song, very befitting here..
'ye jism hai to kya, is rooh ka libas hai'
(what is this body, just a garment of this soul)
Thanks!
Hi Nasnin,
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Hi Unknown,
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Hi RR
ReplyDeleteya long tym indeed! how have u been?
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excellent,. very powerful poem.
ReplyDeleteHi Raghavan
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thoughtful poem
ReplyDeleteWin work... must add that you're good at expression.
ReplyDeleteKeep writing, Adi!
Hi sm
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Hi Shakti!
ReplyDeletethanks a ton yar! I am so glad u liked it :)
You express your feelings very well, A.S. I too feel like you...we are losing ourselves in this fast melee.
ReplyDeleteThe last few lines say everything. But life has to go on.
Take care.
Hi Sandhya!
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot for the lovely compliment :)
ya I agree
Hi, many thanks for stopping by Pen and Paper, I really appreciate your doing so.
ReplyDeleteGreat post, beautiful sentiment. Nice to have met you, I've enjoyed my visit.
Hi Petty Witter
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keep coming :)
Hi Ashwini
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ya, thanks a lot!
alls well pulling on buddy:) stay connected..wishes
ReplyDeleteHi RR
ReplyDeleteyups! :)
Very nice poem like alwayz.....
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